Odyssey Through A Gonorrhea Infested ****

[Master_Yoda77]

Odyssey Through A Gonorrhea Infested ****

Darkness
Sneaking through a forest of black
He falls inside a pink fissure
Drenched in the creamy liquid
He licks it off his skin.

Atramentous leaves are severed
He wipes the clear liquid off
Infecting the fauna near
As well as his apperception.

Violated by the goo
He turns into insanity
And is consumed by the parasite.




I wrote this song from my experimental noisecore band Jesus ****ing Christ (JFC). We have yet to finish writing all of our songs and lyrics...so this is all we have so far...

Its not ment to be serious. The band is a satirical joke band.

 

[cam`]

word choice on apperception, and 'turns into insanity' needs fixing. other than that :bigthumbu

 

[Master_Yoda77]

I see. Thanks for the critque.

What do you mean by word choice? I was trying to say that it infects the animals and his mind.

 

[cam`]

apperception is, as i understand it, our views and dispositions specifically as they are influenced by our past experiences. it just doesn't make sense in this context